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Love, Dreams and Freedom
For a setting and storyline of such rarity and thought, the judges were willing to ignore the numerous punctuation mistakes, and *constant* name confusion (Darien was both 'Endymion' and 'Darien', sometimes in the same sentence, this was never explained and it did actually drive 1 judge nuts) The plot of this story posed serious problems. One judge couldn't even finish it. It actually reminded her of those old sexist romance novels... Serena finds herself in the prince's bed...is RAPED and we just can't see a love story coming out of that. Although perhaps we'd like to read to see how Millennium Guard (a well-revered author, we assume this isn't her best work>) pulled it off, the judges just couldn't. It conflicted too much with beliefs, and the punctuation *did* detract from the story so much as to make it unenjoyable. Grade for creativity is A...but overall we have to give this story a C. Even without the sexism, the very fact that Darien rapes Serena is NOT love story material and will not be supported by UsagiandMamoru.com
This fic recieves an 8 on a scale of 1-10, as some things could of been clearer, the story is cetainly one that is worth reading. Despite ending somewhat depressingly, the beauty of the story, the power and feel impressed the judges and webmistress, so we happily accept this fic into the UsagiandMamoru.com archive!
Serena's Mystical New Life and The Prom Taken directly from one judge's review:
First of all, the whole thing (and I'm referring to both stories here) was one big cliche. Can we say overused ideas? It didn't flow right, the ideas >were all jumbled together in one big heap, and it was extremely confusing. I had no idea that Darien and Brandon were supposed to be the same people, not even when the author said so. Characterization is a big key in making a fanfic a success, and there wasn't much present here. And another thing, giving the Outers Americanized dubbed names is a big no-no. Every Sailormoon fan should know that, even the ones who have never seen anything but the DiC dub. Stay true to the SM world, you'll have an easier time if you do. In the first story, it wasn't even clarified which name belonged to which person, and so you knew knew who was talking! A lot of the storylines from SM were taken and smooshed together in these two fics, and it was very difficult to read. In some places, it even felt like ideas from other fanfics were incorporated into the plot. Bottom line, this has to be one of the most confusing things I have ever read, and it's actually not really worth reading. I'd have to give these two fics a D, but I would invite the author to try again, and this time get a second or even third opinion on your writing before you decide to post it. Having someone else edit your work can be very helpful.
This author captures humour, romance, dating and everything fun and amusing about Serena and Darien! Taking place years later, when they're both in their 20s, Serena winds up working for Darien, and he is still battling the Negaverse with the Scouts but in this fic, no one has figured out who is who yet. The story proceeds to show the hilarious antics between Serena and Darien, their attraction and games, and it's so well written, it deserves a place of honour in the archive! Good job Serena51! We're proud to add you to the UsagiandMamoru.com archive!
"Tears in Heaven" has romantic agnst, where it pulls the reader in, and brings them to tears over the romance of Andrew and Usagi, then the impending future of Andrew, and the helplessness of Mamoru to stand by and watch and honor his promise. The author does not rush into any romance between Usagi and Mamoru but slowly builds up the friendship while they comfort eachother through their sadness over their mutual friend. Sheshows the deeper aspects of Usagi, showing her loyalty to those that she loves, and also following her heart totally. With Mamoru, too, it shows how loyal he is to his friend. and trying to not give into his deeper feelings for Usagi. Later into the story, it looks deeper into their feelings and brings to a head what they truly want, and what they try to deny. It was a fantastic story by Jlala, one of my favorites by her. I would reccomend this story to any new fan to Sailor Moon of the fanfiction world, or to any one who had read all the classics. It is one to read again and again.
Promises Two judges reviewed this.
I like the idea that this story had. The concept was good. However, I felt as if the author rushed through the story too fast to really work with the story line. It was like the author had so many ideas in her head and that she rushed to put them down on paper forgetting to go back and fill in the details. It needs to be more descriptive about people, events and places. The characters were fairly true to their anime portrayal however, I got the idea that they were just in fact carbon copies out of the Translated version of Sailor Moon and that the lines and actions were borrowed from the series. With the story concept the way it was I think the author really could have expanded the characters a little more while still keeping true to their personalities/traits. In short, I feel as thought this is a good start to a story but it still needs some work, it needs to be more detailed and some additional character development.
Another Judge wrote: While there were some characterization problems, and the story could have benefitted from some more detailed explanations, it was fairly well written. However, I feel that it should not be posted on the UM fanfiction site in its current form for the above mentioned reasons.
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